Empty of worries, full of bravado
Straining against confinement
A spirit that won't be denied.
Twisting, turning in swirls of blackness
An unconscious awareness of doom
The auto on its side, upright in the snow
The metal encases me preventing escape.
Electricity crackles with loosened lines
Entrapment saves my life
A chance of escape would mean imminent death
A blessing for the unworthy.
Red-rimmed eyes, devoid of purpose
Roiling clouds in my mind
A troubled awakening to who I am
And a chance to become extraordinary.
(When I came back to blogging this summer, I left all of my old writings behind and started over. I found this poem I wrote last November about my first car accident, and thought I would share.)
115 comments:
That is so insightful and so powerful! Glad you bounced back better than ever!
So beautiful!!
You wrote that in High School? Bravo!
You are an awesome poet!
this is so moving.
I love the last line--"a chance to become extraordinary."
I love it & am so glad you shared it here with us...
wonderful poem...that last line holds a lot of promise...
would love to see more!
WOW! WOW! and WOW!! I would love to see more too.
OH my...I have to tell you that I ran a car into an electric pole when I first had my license. The live wires landed on the truck and I JUMPED OUT without thinking...and by some miracle didn't die.
Which is taking your poem literally and probably not where you were going with it; but it sure did remind me of that day.
I love it; it captures a lot of teenage angst. And you are extraordinary by the way.
I like your poem! It has a similar style to some of mine.
Love this! More please... :)
nice. put it to music. sing it, make a video. $$$$
Love it....you have a way with words. I hope you will post more poems. Have a wonderful day!
I love great poetry!
Haunting and beautiful,
I love this poem, dang your good!! I have an award for you, come on over and pick it up. :)
first? how many have their been?
Nice poem!!
I remember my accident...shudder
Wow - this is soo good! You have a serious talent with words darling ;-)
Beautiful-you are so talented!
Very moving...thanks for sharing!
Yikes how scary!!
Wow. What a great read, scary event though. :/ Makes me want to flip through poems I might have floating around from school years...
Wow, that was moving. Love the last line.
I LOVE poetry. I have written some but not as wonderful as this one. YOU got a gift girl!....
LOVE it!
Grissell
Very good. I could never write good poetry. Something I've accepted. But I like reading it.
...and to think people think teenagers are shallow. Wonderful!
Awesome!! Loved it. Did you write it when you were a teen? Or later?
Wow! Now I wanna hear the whole story about the accident!
What an awesome poet you are. Please promise to share more.
Cece
Wow, that was powerful (no pun intended, but kinda funny now that I think about it). Glad you were ok. My daughters are teenagers and we know car accidents will happen, we just hope they aren't going to be serious. Great poetry tho, can't wait to read more
great poem! more please...
Wow--what a great poem!!
And you are extraordinary! You are a very talented writer, Girl!
that's great work bv! come back! where did you go?
WOW. This is amazing. So happy you survived this and were able to write it out for us!
Wow! Great writing! Very deep.
I was rear ended as a teenage and my car was totaled.
It was a very scary experience.
Nice poem.
sounds like it was really scary! i'm glad you came out of it ok. i remember thinking i was invincible when i was a teenager. looking back i can't believe some of the messed up situations i put myself in. some of them driving related. glad i got my wake up call without near killing myself.
you really ARE extraordinary, btw! :)
Ok I guess the secret is out...yes their is someone special in my life. I REALLY like him. I am never this nervous about a new relationship. I don't want to lose this one. He is what I have been praying for!!! Thank you so much for your comment. I am just going to take one day at a time and see where this goes! :)
thanks for sharing this with us!
Wow! Such a great poem. You are an awesome writer.
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Very cool....I missed you ♥
Wonderful poem! I love discovering great new bloggers and writers. I found you over at Bored Mommy. LOVE your blog!
Beautiful! Love your writing :)
Wow! That's really great!
Fantastic poem. I'm glad you shared it. I'm glad you are okay after the accident too.
I'm so glad you shared! That must have been tough!
Wow, that is excellent.
great job being extraordinary!!!
That was jolting! I bet it was cathartic though.
Very powerful, and very well written too.
I like this.
you are a poet, too?!?! you are amazing!
and i would never want to go back to the teenage years. HORRORS.
Since I am fairly new here I didn't know you wrote poetry. Very good. What a picture you painted with your words. The last two lines are awesome. what hope!
A word smith, I should not be surprised ;)
Beautiful poem!!
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Impressive! I didn't know you could write poetry like that. Guess we learn something new everyday.
Wow! That is beautiful.
Great poem - I can tell that the accident really left an impact with you (no pun intended, but there it is).
YOU are an excellent writer!! Are you published?
And while we are on the subject, how did you get so many followers? What's you secret?
What an effective poem! Thanks for sharing.
That's pretty fantastic!!! Glad you are okay!!
Remember, if you ever stop blogging again, I will hunt you down and force you to stay! :) That was a great poem, and chilling to know that it was true!
that was very moving. and exceptional because you were so young when you wrote it.
Moving, powerful poem, B.V., glad you are okay.
I think about stopping blogging but what else would I do with my time, clean house???
WOW!! Very moving!
A woman of many talents!
Lady you are amazing! What talent!
Oh man, I remember my first accident. I had just bought new tires and was pulling out of the shop. I got hit pulling out.
Wow. You were very lucky! You have such a gift with writing.
What talent you have.. I loved this..
Have a great night..
You were already brilliant in high school? That was good.
BV,
Thanks for visiting me. You're a pretty popular blogger so I'm flattered.
That must have been so frightening!
Oh your a poet and I didn't even know it! Ha Ha - I'm so funny!
In the words of Juno, "You's deep!"
Wow, sounds like some of my poetry I wrote in middle school & high school which I have been saying to myself I should share on my blog but haven't yet! Maybe that is what I will do 2marro .. IDK .. great skill.
Car wrecks are both scary and inspiring events. Not to mention nerve wracking and in some cases life changing.
You have such an exceptional way with words. So glad to know you were okay but it was obviously a life changing experience for you.
Sounds like a valuable lesson learned.
Wow. My brother was in an accident as a teenage and this makes me thing of him and what he went through.
Very powerful!
Thank you for sharing your poem.
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That was great!!!
that is absolutely lovely!
i am glad you bounced back in style...
Wow absolutely beautiful. Thank so much for sharing it.
Wow nice !!!!!!Thanks for sharing :)
So glad you did share! I would never be crative enough to think of writing a poem abouty this. But even small car accidents & fender benders shake me so! Thanks for sharing!
Wow! Amazing job!
I love the last line. Awesome poem. Thanks for sharing!
Wow. I guess I didn't start reading your blog early enough to know that you wrote poetry! Hello, talented much?! :-)
Wow! You are quite a writer!!
Absolutely gorgeous writing.
Brings me back to many feelings I had as a teenager...
and here you are all extraordinary.. ask me. I know. :)
Cheers.. glad that accident wasn't any worse than it sounds!
You continue to surprise me with just how talented and creative you are. All I can say is wow and just enjoy it.
Very nice! I used to write a lot of poetry in high school and then I just kind of stopped. :(
Lovely. Thank you for sharing.
Your words burn with clarity, wisdom and truth. I bow to power of your pen. Bravo!
Oooo, chilling.
Thanks for sharing. Isn't it amazing to look back on old poems? Beautifully insightful.
Seriously amazing. I feel like I should write something more profound. I am so glad you are ok!
Wow...I love it.
You are very talented! Great work!
How about we just skip those years.....uurrrgghhhh
Ahhhh, the wander years. This Ozarks farm child climbed the local water tower with a group of other brain dead teen to paint Class of 1970. I understand our brains weren't fully developed in that stage of life...explains a lot!!!
Your poem was very insightful at any age. I'm lookin' forward to the next one.
Ya'll have the best weekend just chucked full of blessings and in the words of Granny Clampett, "ya'll come back now, ya hear!!!
Beautifully put, I wouldn't go back to being a teen for anything! :)
stirring!
What a poverful poem. Thanks for sharing.I would love to read more.
I really like the imagery you use.
All I can say is wow! That was a great poem!!
You're a talented writer my dear.
My son just got his license last Tuesday!
It's very good! I love the personal development you were able to capture in your poem from that experience!
Very good poem!
And sadly familiar to my teenage years as well!
Wow, such talent!! Sounds like a terrifying experience!
Wow my dear so powerful and a great thing for young kids to read also.
You're so talented!
So insiteful for such a young woman, and so beautifully written.
So glad you survived and went on to write in your blog. Happy to get to "know" you through your blog.
Wishing you and your family a wonderful family!!
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